good review, Kym - but that's a big quote concluding the review, and structurally, it would have been better had you 'unpacked' this quote earlier - because you make some great points prior to the quote, but the quote scaffolds your discussion - it feels like a chunk of you followed by a chunk of quote - you could have cut this up into smaller statements and distributed them through a single evidence-rich paragraph.
good review, Kym - but that's a big quote concluding the review, and structurally, it would have been better had you 'unpacked' this quote earlier - because you make some great points prior to the quote, but the quote scaffolds your discussion - it feels like a chunk of you followed by a chunk of quote - you could have cut this up into smaller statements and distributed them through a single evidence-rich paragraph.
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